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The government should not waste money on arts as this money would be better spent on other projects like sanitation of infrastructure Do you agree with the above statement?

#government #waste #money #arts #projects #sanitation #infrastructure
society
believe
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 that apex power should utilize
money
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the money
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 to fund basic needs rather than spending for leisure. I strongly vote for
this
 statement,
this
 essay will
depicts
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 why is it so.
To begin
 with, supreme power should reserve money for the well-being of individuals. Because lack of medication is one of the major
threat
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threats
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 to a nation so the authorities should make a plan for developing the health sector before spending the cheque for entertaining
public
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the public
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.
However
, only a person who is physically strong can perform
neither
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or
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 participate in an event. For an instance, one of my
friend
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friends
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 who is
great
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a great
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 play-back singer got infected with
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through
throughout
thought
throught
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a throught
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 infection
although
, with the modern treatments cure was lightning fast. So
the
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apply
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medical care should not be given
second
 place when it comes to
developments
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development
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.
On the other hand
, making
community
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the community
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to
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apply
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have a source
income
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of income
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 should be given importance, The era is changing day today so making sure that
literacy
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the literacy
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 rate of the country is rising each year should be yet another factor for budgeting in the nation. When the job market is stable with more
number of
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apply
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opportunities crowd can cultivate
better
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a better
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 standard of living.
For example
, India is known for IITs and IIMs, since the population
have
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has
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privilege
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the privilege
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 of good quality education their pay scale is greater henceforth, it diversely affects their standard of living. To sum up, I am solely convinced by the fact that spending more money on basic needs and infrastructure is important for the citizens rather than enjoying short-term happiness from leisure activities.
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