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In many countries, plastic containers have become more common than ever and are used by many food and drink companies. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The use of
plastic
 among food and drink companies has increased all around the world. Introducing novel health-related diseases as well as being unrecyclable are known as two of the significant drawbacks which outweigh lessening
distribution
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 of pollution as the greatest advantage. The unpracticality of using
plastic
 containers
appear
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 to be rooted in producing
high
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a high
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 number of new problems in people. As these products make up of synthetic materials
such
 as polymers,
the
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every day
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 use of them leads to
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the developing
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developing
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some
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 diseases, the very epitome of which is cancer. Supplementary to
this
, these materials tend to remain in nature for centuries inasmuch as the microorganisms which are responsible for
degradation
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the degradation
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 of natural waste seem to be reluctant to
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such
 man-made products.
This
,
hence
, in the long term, puts the animals’ lives in danger, especially the marines, eventually leading to enormous issues
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 both humans and the ecosystem. On a more positive note, food and drink companies utilize
plastic
 containers to reduce
the
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pollution, transferred among people since they are used only once and
then
 put away.
Nevertheless
, if these wastes are not controlled and cleaned, they could be a threat to the environment and spread some infections among living creatures. All in all,
widely-use
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 of
plastic
 materials brings
a great deal of
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 predicaments among which increasing diseases in humans
in addition
 to remaining in the environment for a long time could be the most worrying matters. These demerits would overshadow the possibility of decreasing the transfer of pollutants in the surroundings as
a
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 main advantage.
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