Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers. Others think that it is dependent on the attitude of the students. Discuss both of the views and give your opinion.

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achievement depends on ideal
teachers
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on the
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of the
students
. In
this
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and give your opinion as well.
To begin
with, most
people
think that education totally depends on the
teachers
. Because if the
teachers
know how to tackle the
students
so it will create a big
impact
on
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students'
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studies
.
In other words
,
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Different
students
have different
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mindsets
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so they know
treat
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them how to treat them.
For instance
,In my school
one
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the
teacher
knows
that
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how to handle different
students
in different ways .because some
students
will
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to be
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a teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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who
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teach
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tech
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teach
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them with kindness.
Moreover
, I would like to outline more
impact
of having a good instructor in your life
such
as some
teachers
have tricks
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different in easy ways. Most
teachers
know how to solve different reading by different tricks.
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, In
Pakistan
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there is one institute which
having
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famous in
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teachers
and
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who ever
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goes
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that coaching so they can
passed
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out easily in their
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exams.
On the other hand
, some
people
believe that
teachers
doesnot
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does not
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play
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virtual role in their life and it all
depend
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on the
students
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attitude towards
the
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studies
.
such
as some
students
who are so serious
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studies
. whose
students
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matter how the
teacher
their goals are clear about the
studies
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that if your kids will be
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on
the
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study and
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their attitude
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will be good so automatic they are good in
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their studies
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.
Furthermore
, I would
to
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like one more thing
of
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students
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attitude
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toward
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studies
matters. few
students
who
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they can take from youtube.
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,
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on their
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they
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will take out the information from
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are serious
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the
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education. To sum up, The vast majority
people
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of people
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that
teachers
create
impact
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an impact
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in
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their education but others
thinks
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that it totally depends on the
students
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student's
students'
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behavior
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behaviour
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. In my opinion,
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having
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have
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big
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impact
on the
students
such
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as
teacher
knows how to
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tackle
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track
the
students
and some
teachers
have some tricks
of
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solving.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational success
  • necessary knowledge
  • effective teaching strategies
  • emotional support
  • self-discipline
  • fosters
  • real-world scenarios
  • synergy
  • passionate
  • skilled
  • motivated
  • disciplinary
  • educational ecosystem
  • cultivates
  • foundation
  • absorb
  • apply
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