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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

#students #internet #effects #purposes
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It is certainly true that nowadays
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 is widely used in education around the world. People’s opinions differ, some claim that it is beneficial for teaching and learning while others believe that it is harmful
for
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students
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 and should be restricted. Personally, I believe that the
use
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 of
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 should be limited in some ways, but it is still a valuable educational tool. At the outset,
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 is a product of
modern
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 world and we should be thankful and grateful for its possibilities. It is widely used in
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workplaces
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 and people’s everyday lives, both for finding
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, personal finance , social networking and
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keeping in touch with relatives and friends.
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,
students
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 should learn
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hot
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 to
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 it correctly.
In addition
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,
students
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also
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 need it for research for school and university subjects. Undoubtedly, the most up-to-date
information
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 can be found on the
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. Surfing the Net is a convenient way of finding out
information
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 and developing independent research skills.
On the other hand
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, the
Internet
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 has some negative aspects.
For example
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, not all
web sites
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 are reliable sources of accurate
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.
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,
student
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 need to learn how to control the time
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 surfing, as in many cases websites or social networks are like rabbit holes, you enter easy but to get out of it is a real quest.
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, many
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 getting ready
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 projects just copy them without analyzing and understanding, they will just pretend that these are their own works. In my opinion,
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the teacher
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teacher
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 should teach
students
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 properly how to
use
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internet
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 as an additional source of
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. In conclusion,
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 is a great invention of humankind, but
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adults and especially,
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the teacher
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teacher
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 should explain to
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student
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 the real importance of it, and help them to develop their research skills. If the learners know how to
use
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 the
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 they will become better
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 and will have better opportunities in
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 future careers.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
  • hinder
  • crucial
  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
  • discerning
  • credible sources
  • incorporation
  • engagement
  • adaptivity
  • personalized learning
  • innovative
  • pedagogy
  • digital age
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