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In order to learn a language well, we should also learn about the country as well as the cultures and lifestyle of the people who speak it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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nowadays,
people
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 learn about the country as well as the
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 and living
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people
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the people
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 who speak it. I m strongly disagree with
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contrast
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several
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several
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aganist
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against
 adopting their
culture
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 and living
style
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 as well
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 as in some
culture
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 alcohol is forbidden for them so
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learning about their living
style
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 and
culture
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arenot
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are not
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, Islamic countries,
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do not
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 allow their members to adopt any
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 and living
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 would like to highlight one more major impact of learning
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events
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 and
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. because
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the living
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 relationship is quite normal in foreign countries.
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, couples
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 together without nikkah which isn't allowed.
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couple
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having
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living
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 relationship and they
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 can do sex as well without marriage. To contrary, some
people
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 argue that it is important if learn their language so you
also
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 and
lifestyles
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 as well. because if you go into their country so have how
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know
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 about their
events
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 and
lifestyles
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 as well. if
people
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 learn them so they
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know
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 about their
culture
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 and
events
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 because it
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is important
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 if migrate to
different
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 country. To illustrate, my cousin
migrate
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 to
canada
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Canada
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 so
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 important to learn about
events
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 and
culture
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 as well.
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,
people
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 who agree with learning about their
culture
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lifestyles
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has
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 some valid reason
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learn
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learning
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 about their
culture
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 so they can know about their holidays and traditions as well. To sum up, In order to learn about their mother tongue, ought
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 important to learn traditions and living
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style
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.
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I disagree
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I'm
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 disagree with some valid points
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 as living relationships is forbidden in Islam and alcohol is haram in Islam
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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