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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #lives #change
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something
samething
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something
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change
 is best sparked a lot of
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 these days. While some people believe that doing
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 thing is good for their
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 security, I agree with those who believe that
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 of
work
 pays more and
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broadens
broaden
 their thinking. On the one hand, supporters of
this
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pocessing
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processing
possessing
 a steady life is more likely to have positive aspects.
To begin
 with, doing
same
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 thing makes a person
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on
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 that
work
.
hence
 they no need to attend special
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 frequently to get update new things periodically.
secondly
 performing the same task daily is easy to follow. after
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your routine
work
.
However
, I side with those who believe that
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 taking
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risk is the
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progress.
In other words
, people usually
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dont
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don't
 take risks in life.
Secondly
,
change
 in
work
 or profession
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broadens
 the mind and thinking of any individual. and
also
 it increases the creativity of the individual.
Besides
this
, these crowds experience everything in their lifetime and easily
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 the fact that the future is unpredictable
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hence
 we should always to ready to accept any kind of circumstances.
For example
, we see some people who easily jump from one career to other just for having an idea of the other field.As a consequence, adding some fun and getting educated everywhere possible to lead a better life .As a lively and social person , I think
such
 a type of attitude is really beneficial in the modern world. In conclusion,
although
 doing
same
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work
 makes any individual
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expert
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an expert
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on
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 that field, I believe that
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those who
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change
 their field will
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broadens
broaden
 their mind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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