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4.Female school-leavers going into higher education from 1980 to 2015

The bar chart shows the percentage of female students pursuing university education in five countries between 1980 and 2015. Overall, almost every country, except for Australia, saw an increase in the rate of
women
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 going to college.
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, Australia had the highest proportion of female freshmen, while the opposite was true for South Korea. The percentage of Australian
women
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 who went to university after high school topped the list and stayed unchanged over 35 years, at 58%.
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, in South Korea, only 15% of female school-leavers pursued higher education in 1980, but the figure doubled fifteen years later, despite still being the smallest proportion. Initiating at 50%, France had the
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 biggest group of
women
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 entering college in 1980, and the rate slightly rose to 54% in 2015. Meanwhile, there were 35% and 38% of
women
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choosing
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 to go to university in the UK and USA at the beginning of the reviewed time. An increase
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 20% was seen in both countries over the
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 15 years, with the figures climbing to 55% and 58% in the UK and the USA, respectively.

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