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Air pollution is one of the largest problems the world is facing today. What are some causes of air pollution and what measures can be proposed to solve this problem?

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Air
pollution
 is one of the biggest troubles
which
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that
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 humanity faced in
XXI
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the XXI
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 century.
This
 essay will discuss why deforestation and greenhouse
gases
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 emissions manufactured by factories can cause
air
pollution
 and how non-waste
production
 and reforestation can help to slow down
this
 problem. Greenhouse gases like
carbon
dioxide
 and nitrogen
dioxide
 pollute the
air
 and cause acid
rains
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rain
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. Acid rains
acidifies
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acidify
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 the soil from which plants absorb nutrients and minerals. Deforestation slows down the conversion of
carbon
dioxide
 into oxygen. According to the UN, the amount of
carbon
dioxide
 processed by trees fell by 7% between 2017 and 2018. Non-waste
production
 is one of the most effective solutions
of
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air
pollution
. Non-waste
production
 not only helps to increase
production
,
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but,
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also
it
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apply
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helps to decrease
amount
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the amount
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 of waste created by plants and factories. Reforestation can help to increase the share of oxygen in atmospheric
air
. Plants convert
carbon
dioxide
 into oxygen by photosynthesis. “One hectare of poplar forest adsorbs 7-8 tons of
carbon
dioxide
 per
year
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” said co-owner of Lukoil Leonid Fedun in the interview about perspectives of trade in
air
 purified from
carbon
dioxide
.
Thus
 it is clear that finding a solution to the problem of
air
pollution
 is a common task. At stake is the life of not only humanity but the entire planet as a whole.
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