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Some people think it is more important to spend public money on prompting healthy lifestyle in order to spend it on the treatment for people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 agree with spending public money on treating people who are
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 ill. it is very important to build a
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healty
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healthy
 public
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society
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society
 if each of the
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individual
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individuals
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lifting
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 out a minority will turn all the
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 in an ecosystem in danger towards illness if some are left out not to be treated
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 been
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happened
 in history that neglecting the health issues of
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some will lead to the breakage
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harmful
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 pandemic. as in the early
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nineteenth
 century the outspread of
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 flue was the cause of
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forbidding
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minor people who were not able to afford the medical expenses in the aftermath it is found that the major part of
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 in the europian
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continent
 was wiped out of the disease As it is very important to take care of
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fellow beings in the premise
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healthy
 community . the public money which must
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contribution from all the individuals of that community
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 for the better life of the whole public society . if
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 left out it will affect much of the
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society
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spread
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