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In some countries, the widespread use of the internet has given people more freedom to work or study at home or traveling to work or college. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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After the pandemic in 2020, there is a debated topic about the positive and negative aspects of working or studying on-site or remotely. I personally believe that the benefits of having a flexible workplace are more than the drawbacks. I will elaborate on my opinions. On the one hand, remote
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 has some benefits for a variety of
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 like those who have disabilities. If a worker cannot go to the
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, it is better for them to do their
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 from home. Encouraging the different types of
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,
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 as on-site and off-site, could really decrease or even eliminate inequality in job opportunities for disabled
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 and other workers.The annual bulletin of the National Bureau of Statistics revealed that the disparities between normal
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 and the disabled in finding jobs decreased dramatically from 66% in 2019, the year before the pandemic, to 44% in 2022.
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, some
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, regardless of job and income level, prefer working outside the
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. They tend to
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 in unofficial situations and be convenient when they
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.
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, language developers in computer companies would like to drink their coffee and do responsibilities in Starbucks, far away from any official
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 routine in the
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.
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, some talented students prefer studying at home
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 of going to school every day and wasting their priceless time.
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 different groups take advantage of working in their desired conditions.
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, different
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 types have some possible disadvantages like destroying organization rules and collaboration between colleagues. In the past decade, workers should adhere to the organization's rules, instructions and laws. They had to go to
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 at a certain time and had limited break time in a day.
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, they were not allowed to leave the
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 unless they got permission from their superior. What’s more, flexible working conditions are seriously detrimental to collaboration and teamwork in organizations. In the new era of working, there is no collaboration and helping among colleagues and they should
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 solely at home or any place.
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,
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 situation could lower the quality of
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 and increase the maintenance of the organization. In conclusion,
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 the increase in equal working opportunities for different
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 and preparing convenient places to
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, depending on their comfort, I think that the advantages of working or studying in different situations outweigh the disadvantages.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and explore it thoroughly before moving on to the next idea.
task achievement
Although your essay is clear and comprehensive, try to present counterarguments and refute them effectively. This will provide more depth to your analysis.
general
Pay attention to the precision of language, and try to avoid small grammatical errors or awkward phrasing.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly states the writer’s position and provides context for the essay.
supported main points
The essay includes relevant and specific examples that support the main points.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion effectively summarizes the key arguments and restates the writer’s opinion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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