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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Businesses
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 nowadays often focus on the new
features
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 of their
products
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 in their advertising. While some people might wonder about the validity and the actual value of these new
features
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, I believe it’s a positive
development
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 for
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society as a whole. Whenever
businesses
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 advertise the new
features
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 of their
products
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 or the launch of
the
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new
products
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, it’s a sign of relentless research and
development
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 over a period of time in order to better serve the customers’ needs. It’s the display of those
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businesses’s
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 tenacity and ingenuity, which translates in the customers’ minds - “new
features
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, easier life”. Customers who appreciate those new
features
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 or
products
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 will continue to fund them for more technological innovation in the future through
process
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the process
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 of purchasing and word-of-mouth marketing. I strongly believe it is a positive
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 when
businesses
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 emphasize that their
products
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 are new in some way in their advertising. It signals that
businesses
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 still pay attention and want to serve even more demanding needs from
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group
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 of customers.
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, it stirs up competitiveness in a
freemarket
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free market
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 economy, which translates into an ongoing effort for technological
breakthrough
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. Different
businesses
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 in the same industry can learn from one another, striving to capture the most market by being able to serve the most amount of customers as possible. In conclusion,
demonstration
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the demonstration
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 of new
features
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 or new
products
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 in
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businesses
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 advertising is a sign of
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positive
development
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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