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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Some people are happy to stay in the same area for their whole life, while others prefer living in many different places.

Living in
certain
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a certain
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place
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whole
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their whole
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life
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make
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makes
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 some
people
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 enjoy their
life
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, whereas others
in
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on
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contrary
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the contrary
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 reckon that
constant
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the constant
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 changing of living
place
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 will bring
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satisfaction
satisfation
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satisfaction
 to them.         There
are
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is
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number
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a number
the number
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 of advantages
of
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to
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 both types of living.
For instance
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, if you live in one city
whole
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for whole
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 your
life
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, you are
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familiar
fimiliar
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familiar
 with every corner of your hometown. It
also
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 refers to
people
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.
Moreover
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, you will have
somehow
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a somehow
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 stable
life
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 and will be able to spectate the development of the
place
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 where you live
,
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apply
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 and notice
most
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the most
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 improvements that
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occurred
occured
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occurred
with
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in
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this
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place
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. As an example, I can mention most of my acquaintances and as I know all of them are
pleasant
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pleased
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 with their lives.         
On the other hand
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, plenty of
people
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 do not want to
spent
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spend
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life
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a life
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 living in the same
place
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. They want to have
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adventures
advantures
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advantages
 and see the entire world. Or another reason is meeting new
people
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 and having acquaintances
in
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at
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 any point on earth. Of course, there is
disadvantage
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a disadvantage
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 too, in my point of view, you can not have a real home if you travel most time of your
life
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.
Personally
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,Personally
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 I, do not know anyone who would prefer living in various places during
lifetime
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my lifetime
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.        To sum up, both types of living have
own
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their own
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 benefits,
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however
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,however
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 I would choose to
spent
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spend
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 my entire
life
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 in one
place
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 than
changing
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change
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 it from time to time.

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