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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disgree with this statement?

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Nowadays ,migration from one
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 to another has become increasingly popular.It has been argued that moving to a foreign
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 and having to speak a foreign language ,can lead to
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detrimental consequences.
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 ,and talking in a non-native language can cause some problems
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 as being misunderstood and breaking that
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's laws. One of the major drawbacks of being a foreigner
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is being non completely understood .
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 actually can happen even if the pronunciation is clear and the person is fluent,and that's because one can say something that seems completely innocent to him,only to turn up to be inappropriate in that
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's culture.
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, in some
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 it is considered fine to ask someone how much he gets paid,but in the united kingdom ,
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,it can make people feel uncomfortable ,
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,it can be taken as rudeness.
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,different languages can be an obstacle and can lead to huge problems. Another issue that can face those people is that sometimes
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 they can break the
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.That's because what might seems a normal cultural
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 for them,is considered against the law in that particular
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 ,in Sweden physical punishment for children is considered a crime ,and leads to children being taken by the government .obviously ,physical punishment is a way of discipline
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, severe consequences can result from migration to a non-native
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living in
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country
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 can result in many problems.
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's laws can be serious and leads to severe consequences.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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