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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disgree with this statement?

#country #language #disgree
Nowadays ,migration from one
country
 to another has become increasingly popular.It has been argued that moving to a foreign
country
 and having to speak
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a foreign language ,can lead to
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detrimental consequences.
This
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al
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 being placed in a foreign
country
 ,and talking in
non-native
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 language can cause some problems
such
 as being misunderstood and
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breaking
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 that
country
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lows
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. One of the major
drawback
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 of being a foreigner
,
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is being non completely understood .
This
 actually can happen even if the
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pronunciation
 is clear and the person is fluent,and
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 because one can say something that
seem
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 completely
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innocent
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innocent
 to him,only to turn up to be inappropriate in that
country
's culture.
For example
, in some
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 it is
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considered
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considered
 fine to ask someone how much he
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 paid,but in
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for
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 instance,it can make people feel uncomfortable ,
moreover
,it can be taken as rudeness.
thus
,different
language
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 can be an
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obstacle
 and can
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 to huge
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problems
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problems
. Another issue that can face those people is that sometimes
unintentially
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unintentionally
 they can break the low.
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 because what might seems a normal
cultrual
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cultural
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habits
 for them,
it
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 is
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considered
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considered
 against the
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 in that particular
country
.
for instance
 ,in
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Sweden
sudden
 physical punishment for children is
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considered
cosidered
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considered
 a crime ,and leads to
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child
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be
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 taken by the government .obviously ,physical punishment is a way of
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discipline
that is
 adopted by many people and can end with them breaking the low and
lossing
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losing
 their child.
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therefore
therfore
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, severe
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consequences
consequence
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consequences
 can result from migration to a
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country
. In
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conclusion
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conclusion
,
,
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living in
foreign
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country
 can result in many problems.
This
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 issues miscommunication ,and not
be
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familiar
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familiar
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lows
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 can be serious and leads to severe consequences.
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