Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether the government should enhance road safety by increasing the legal
age
for driving cars or any other autos. In
this
essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that every year gives a big amount of knowledge to every human and they are becoming wiser and smarter. Whether authorities would increase the minimum legal
age
for driving, that definitely would lead to much
less
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car
accidents on the roads.
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, that may save some young souls from thoughtless actions and save them from dangerous situations.
For instance
, teenagers at 16 years old in the USA or students
at
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the
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age
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18-25 in Europe are very likely to go to parties and drink alcohol.
However
, these humans, after the party, somehow have to go home or to any other destination by themselves, but if they have a
car
, they may drive home with that auto.
This
thoughtless action may lead to an enormous situation like an accident on the road or even worse.
On the other hand
, most
of
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people don’t assert that it is really needed to increase the legal
age
for driving a
car
, because
as
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a person at 16 years old as at 25 might be able to do it very carefully and by the rules.
For example
, if one human could feel adult and ready for driving a
car
at 16 years old,
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another human being won’t be able to do it even at the
age
of 30, because of his fears or any other factor that ceases him.
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means that even if the government would change the minimum legal
age
for driving, it doesn’t mean that it definitely would help to reduce
car
accidents on the roads and increase safety, because
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teenagers, as adults might get into an accident even if they were careful or had a great driving experience. Having considered both views,
i
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would assert that increasing the minimum
age
for driving isn’t very essential,
although
it may save
someones
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life by protecting them from some spontaneous and stupid decisions while young.
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