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In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Agriculture
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 is the main source of
food
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 supply to people throughout the world and it is now equipped with advanced
technology
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 applied to all aspects of farming. Despite the improvements, a significant amount of people
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 staying hungry which is a global health problem. In my following ,essay
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 will illustrate underlying reasons and possible solutions for
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 with,
food
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 insufficiency is mainly observed in underdeveloped
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 due to
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 of reasons.They mainly use manpower for their
agriculture
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 while developed
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 apply the latest
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.On the other ,hand new
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 quality of seeds to give rise to more crops than regular seeds, resisting climate change and shorter duration for crops, all these are applied in developed
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 rather than others. Poor
countries
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 don't have enough budget to get that
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 to their
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 and follow the regular farming methods. Coming to the possible solution, is mainly by aiding the poor
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 by supplying necessary
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 and equipment freely.WHO and other world organizations have to play a vital role to help poor
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 by funding money to invest
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 new aspects of
agriculture
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 to improve crops with the ultimate aim of increasing
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 availability. Developed
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 economies mainly depend on industries and more job opportunities should make available for poor
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 in their counties. In conclusion, new agricultural advancements should be made available to poor
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 that depend on regular
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 to improve
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 availability and
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 b to minimize the population starving in the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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