Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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and popular notion that there should fixed penalty for each
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the terms of every
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crime
and give a proper punishment. The following essay will discuss each point of view and explain why police have to take every detail of
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consideration. On the one hand, there are
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supporting the idea of fixed punishment and
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sense because it would be much easier and
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the same time faster to judge any kind of
crime
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consideration all facts may lead to
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misjudge and can get some innocent
people
in prison.
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, who could actually kill someone
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accidentally
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accidentally
, can be prisoned and
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will not be able to collect any evidence of his non-communion, due to any sort of
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not even
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into account.
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people
who count any circumstances related to the
crime
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every single move of the suspect,
such
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,
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can give anyone a chance to justify himself in front of the judge.
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robbery and a robbers that was abused by other
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would
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the suspects. In conclusion, I would like to add that despite the fact that fixed punishment can give some benefits to our society there
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still more disadvantages.
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, the judicial system must be objective and take into account all the details.
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