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Some people believe that schools should teach foreign languages for primary school children. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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The trend of educating foreign languages in school is getting high day by day. There are cons & pros of it,
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 in my opinion, it is always better to have any foreign
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 for your future. I will describe my point of view in the below essay.
To begin
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 with, I believe having a foreign
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 is a kind of another skill and the good thing is, most schools are teaching a foreign
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 from 5th grade. There are a lot of benefits to it.
Firstly
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, If you have a foreign
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then
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 in the future you can work as a highly skilled worker in top government level jobs like foreign embassy or translator of the minister.
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, you can go to any foreign country for higher studies or work.
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, I learned french in 7th grade and now if I want to go to Canada for work
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 I can easily interact with any french person.
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, you can start your side business of teaching foreign languages which will increase your income.
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, if everyone is learning foreign languages
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 people will start moving abroad which will impact the labour market of their origin country. Another disadvantage is, people will stop talking in their national
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 which will low down the rank of
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 on the international
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 scale. In conclusion, if you have any foreign
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 in your skills
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 you always have another plan to start a new life in case your current job is not going well.
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