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Health care should not be provided for free regardless of a person’s income. The health of a person is in their own hands and they should, therefore, be held accountable for that. Do you agree with this opinion?

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There is no doubt that
health
care
 is always a very hot problem. It is said that
people
 need to pay for
health
care
 irrespective of a person's income. I totally disagree with
this
 opinion.
Although
 everyone
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should
ahould
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should
 keep themselves healthy, the government have the responsibility for paying for as well as giving their citizens the best medical service. In the
first
 place, obviously, the pace of life is faster and faster.
People
 are busier and busier, they have more work to solve as well as less time to spend on themselves and their families.
In other words
, they have no time to take
care
 of their
health
.
Moreover
, the fee is quite high, which
make
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makes
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 a contribution to the fact that
people
 don't want to go for a
health
 check. If
health
care
 is free and the government stimulate
people
 to have annual check-ups, they will find how beneficial they can get from regular
health
care
.
As a result
, they will arrange a time to go to hospitals or clinics to protect their
health
.
In addition
, the proportion of the poor is the main reason why
health
care
 should be
on
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in
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 the house.
Although
this
 rate has decreased dramatically, the figure is still a hot concern. Especially, in most developing countries, the percentage accounts for more than 50 % of their population.
Thus
, if
health
care
 must be paid for, the poor will not have enough money to
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afford
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afford
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itafford
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.
Consequently
, epidemics will spread rapidly, the number of deaths will increase and the national economy is going worse and worse. Only by providing free
health
care
 to inhabitants, can both residents and the financial system develop better and better. To sum up, to make sure that all citizens will have better and healthier and stronger immunity, the government ought to have responsibility for providing free medical services to
people
.
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