In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays​ ​than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Currently, an increasing number of citizens are making the decision to live unaccompanied rather than with others.
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opinion, I firmly believe that
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a negative impact on their development. One argument against
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model of
life
is that due to the fluctuation of the economy has increased, the standards and the quality of
life
have become more expensive than before.
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, the price of the products has raised approximately twice and
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results
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in a higher cost of living.
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, not only the products have suffered
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growth, but
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a peak of too. Another issue could be
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isolation which may affect
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individuals who have a lonely coexistence. It is well known that if you have a rich context where you have got friends, family and
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support, you will not probably become depressed but if not, the probability rises sharply.
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space is an important variable to take into account because if the society had all the surface that they desire to live in their country, a significant majority would choose to live alone. Despite
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appeal, many families, who love to
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together and share a house, decide not to separate
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another
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whole
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, saving money and raising their economy to make other plans. To conclude, there are many different problems from living alone
such
as the economy, mental health, or the ability
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what we have,
therefore
, we should live in
community
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