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You recently went on holiday and your friend let you a travel guidebook. Write a letter to friend in your letter. Tell your friend about that book Explain how the guidebook was helpful Say when and how you will return the guidebook.

#holiday #friend #travel #guidebook #book
I’m writing
this
 letter to let you know that I went on
vacations
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few
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 days ago with my family and your
guide
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guidebook
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book
 was imaging. Actually, I went on
holidays
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holiday
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 to Delhi. We visited Red fort, Taj Mehal, India gate and many other nearby places. It was one
week
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 trip which provided all of us
mental
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 satisfaction. As you know I visited Taj Mehal for the
first
 time in my life and I was on cloud nine after watching it. We were there by train and booked
e-rikshaw
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an e-rikshaw
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 for seaming purposes. I assure you that it is one of the best places to let one’s has down. You provided me tourist guidebook which helped me a lot. With
the
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 help of it, I booked my train tickets in advance to the nearest station
of
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tourist places.
This
book
 really worked as a killing two birds with one stone, it
is only provides
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 me with exact locations but adds
on
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to my knowledge. At the same
time
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this
book
 is very handy which made
me
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my journey memorable. I return
you
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this
book
 by the
next
 weekend so that you can start your project on ‘TOURIST ATTRACTIONS’.
It the
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next
 week, I’ve
schedule
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 my meeting.
Mr.
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 Akhil and after
that
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 I’ll visit
to
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your home and I’ll
also
 show you the awesome pictures of
trip
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. See you soon. Kirandeep Kaur
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