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The gap between the rich and the poor is increasingly wide, as rich people become richer and poor people grow poorer. What problems could this situation cause? What are the solutions to address those problems?

#gap #people #situation #address
Hello everyone, I am Unal. I will deal with which members we have possessed some information during the process and what
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utilized before the presentation. Basically, we cannot accomplish
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 organization, so we planned to visit specifically a dog shelter which includes an inordinate number of dogs. Moving altogether to the “Doghouse” shelter, we have worked with shelter administration
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 and some specialists.
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, we needed additional information about the ADA Animal club;
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 with volunteer communities.
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, we have made an enquiry among the ADA community to determine their regard toward stray dogs. We will plan soon to run into
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contact with other shelters.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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