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Difference between countries is becoming less evident each year. Nowadays, all over the world people share some fashoins, advertising, brands, eating habits and TV channels. Do the advantages of this trend outweight the disadvantages?

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All countries have their own special cultures,fashions and tv channels.Currently,
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hard to discriminate countries
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 each other because of sharing the same trends.So I am gonna discuss
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 and cons of
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 with the merits,social media plays
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 role in society.
Public
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 can allocate
informations
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 which
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 according to their view around the
eart
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earth
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.So,it can bestow the opportunity
them
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 to share cultures and fashions with each other.
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,migration has
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 which can change the way of culture.
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, people migrate
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result
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 they begin to follow
cultures
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the cultures
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 and fashions
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 the same nation while
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the majority
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 of them forget their own
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. One of the cons of
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 trend is that,cheated by social media.
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 food, every country has
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its own
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 national dishes but nowadays
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this
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 different meals
available
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every
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 part of the earth. To conclude,day by day the era is becoming more modern and
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 will definitely affect the response of people to learn all kinds of knowledge from different parts of the world.
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,in the near future,
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 between different types of people become disappear for
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common trends.
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