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In spite of ther advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

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Food is a mandatory need of every living organism on
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 planet. In
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 fast face of the world, where plenty of equipment has been invented for farming despite that, billions of
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 still suffering from starvation. Multiple measures can be adopted to overcome
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 miserable situation. To commence with that l, it is the obligatory responsibility of the government to make sure the availability of edibles for individuals.
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 flawless supply of food in deprived areas. According to a recent evaluation of research 55% of the whole population of India, has to live on footpaths, whilst sleeping on an empty stomach.
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,
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 are very destitute to help their children for the fulfilment of basic needs of proper nutrition.
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 inhabitants suffer from malnutrition.
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, nations have been developed, meanwhile depending on mechanical resources rather than manpower which is causing a lack of job opportunities. And
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 diverting
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 toward laziness. The government are
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 working as a machine which has no sympathy for hungry
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.
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 there is a luxury of abandoned land which is affected by some serious drought in the past two or three decades. The irrigation department can easily convert those lands into green land by putting in some petty effort. That could be very productive for farming as well as cultivation of different crops which could be those
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 who are living under the swear conditions of hunger.
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, china introduces to the world various way to cultivate multiple vegetables from the same plant regardless they are seasonal or not. In conclusion, it could be a burning issue in the coming days and can be the cause of human deaths or could display
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physical disabilities in the human body
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. Agencies should implant shelter homes, where homeless and wonder
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 can easily find food for themselves l.
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