The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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social
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to communicate, and it replays eyes to eyes interaction in our generation. I
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the
face
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contact is more important that any online
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communications
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communication
.
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communication
is more needed in our century. We can
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people
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different
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continent
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by
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;
moreover
, we do not have to interact with family every weekend and
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time
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to them. We can simply ring on
face
time
and talk with ourselves.
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, my aunt is living in Germany. I do not have
time
to visit her every month,so
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can talk to her by
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smart
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phone
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reason, is
phone
help.
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. We can book an hour in
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calendar and he will call
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this
time
.
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, lots of
people
in Poland use
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government recommend old
people
to do
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. In spite of the fact that
,
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social
media
is replacing
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face
interaction it has much more demerits like
:
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addiction and
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problem
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. Social
media
is now very addictive because of
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algorithm
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. Lots of my generation is
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to social
media
, they think that
this
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face
contact. They spend their free
time
scrolling
media
, rather than hanging out with their peers. In my school, almost every school goers after school spent free
time
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instead
of
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with friends . Many
people
say that spending
to
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much
time
on social
media
can cause social problems and bad social skills. It is fact that
,
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many
people
do not see the differences between real life and internet life. They think that
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is the same, but it doesn't. In conclusion, even though social
media
is important,
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that
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face
interaction is the clue to not
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social and
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communication
problems.
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