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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweight the disadvantages?

#museums #charge #admission #people #outweight
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Museums are considered one the amazing places to be visited by
tourists
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, which include a
lot
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 of historical things that represent the
country
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 and old civilizations. Most countries usually put entrance
fees
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 for them, while others keep it free of charge. Despite the fact that charging people for entering museums benefits the economy but it
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 discourages them from entering those. In any case, a
lot
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 of people are usually willing to learn more about their
country
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, their history and even other historical civilizations. Some of them have money to pay for entry
fees
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 but others don't.
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,
tourists
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 might pay for it but
residents
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 might not. There are a
lot
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 of disadvantages to charging a resident admission fee. For ,example a
lot
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 of them will not be able to learn about their own
country
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.
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, there might be aggressive behaviours between
residents
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 who are not able to afford it and
tourists
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 who are.
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, people will misbehave in their
country
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, since the government is not giving them a chance to enter a museum for free.
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, there are some advantages of charging everyone admission
fees
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. One of them is to lessen the crowdedness in these locations and give chances for
tourists
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 to explore those locations.
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, not only its result in government profits, but
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 it keeps these places calm and the
country
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 will pay less in re-innovation them.
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, it gives a chance for more employment in these locations, so more jobs will be available for
residents
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. To sum up, there are advantages and disadvantages to charging admission
fees
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 in museums, but the negative effects are more, and governments should at least charge only
tourists
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 or at least keep one of two days a week for
residents
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 only to enter for free.
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