These days people are living into their 90's and beyond. As a result, there is increasing concern about care for the elderly. Do you think it is the responsibility of the family to care for their elderly members or should the government be held responsible?
It is
being
thought that a family should be in charge of caring Unnecessary verb
apply
elderly
relatives, but some Change preposition
for elderly
people
believe that the government
should take these responsibilities. The problem has been raising in developed countries where people
are able to live 90 and more years. In my opinion, families
must support their previous generations because the government
is usually faceless.
Family members living in a close-knit family always know better what their parents or other senior relatives require in terms of medical care, mental support, or just know
an individual’s personality. Wrong verb form
knowing
Furthermore
, families
already have the knowledge and abilities to help their elderly, so it should not create a lot of additional hassle. Taking care of a person who raised you or has been with you during your life should be respected and appreciated by a
society as well. Remove the article
apply
For instance
, a lot of major religions have specific thoughts that approve and inspire people
to respect your
parents and seniors in general.
Some Correct pronoun usage
their
people
might not have an immediate family, or they were less connected with other relatives, so there are no humans who are ready to take care of you
. That being said, the Correct pronoun usage
them
government
should help such
individuals. Although
they will receive professional help in most cases, it might only damage because government
institutions such
as retirement houses are faceless, and people
working there are not emotionally bound to retired habitants. If I were old, I would not want this
destiny.
In conclusion, I would like to emphasize that the best way to support seniors is to allow them to be with their families
when they are retired. I recommend living in extended families
where grandparents living with you are considered to be normal.Submitted by skoobrs13 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite