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People are becoming famous with the help of TV programme and the internet.  Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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modern life, individuals  are turning out to
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well-known humans through  the
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 and
TV
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programme
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This
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 of the
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 and
TV
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programme
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 and provide
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a logical conclusion. The two main advantages of becoming
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 person through the
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  or
TV
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programme
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 are
these kind
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 of
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 provide
people
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 with
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 myriad number of money and they have
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respect
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the
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 large number of
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, if
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 are putting their videos or other things on the
internet
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 after
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 things continuously bring too much money duration of their working life.
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, after years, they can commerce to earn the high respect  among the  individuals and they are able to go
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everywhere without any problem, because of  high esteem among the
people
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, to be a famous person with the help of
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TV
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a TV
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programme
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 or the
internet
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 has some major disadvantages like
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 of
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a career
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 and have not free time to spend with family members. most
people
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 who
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 famous  through the
internet
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 their rank or esteem might
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 after
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or
her
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 rank rise to the peak and
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 to bad conditions.
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,  after they to be a famous person, they may not have any free time for
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their family
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 and
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 things lead to
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 relationship. To conclude,
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 there are some advantages like
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good respect and earn the money, it has an extremely negative impact
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 family and their high rank may
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