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some people believe that car free days are effective ways to reduse air pollutions

#people #car #reduse #air #pollutions
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Air
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pollution
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 is the fourth cause of death in the human population and the role of automobiles in
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 field is very significant. In many ,countries
governments
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 have named a day as
car–free
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 or clean
air
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 to make
people
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 aware of the dangers of
air
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pollution
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. in
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 ,essay some ways to have clean
air
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 will be discussed.
Air
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pollution
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 has been a topic of much thought and discussion for the past several decades and it is one of many
people
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 s main concerns, especially urban dwellers.
Car-free
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The car-free
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 day is one the ways to control the
emition
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emission
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 of greenhouse gases. In
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 way, talking about solutions,
governments
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 have an important role. They must pass the roles to decrease these concerns. Automobile factories are obliged to comply with environmental standards and replace worn-out cars.
Governments
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 should encourage
people
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 to use public transportation like buses, metro and taxis.
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, electric cars are the other attractive but expensive option that can be used as another solution. Trees are the lungs of the earth; they absorb carbon dioxide and emit oxygen, so by cutting down trees we are actually destroying these most important earth s organs.
As
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an
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instance , in Tehran , in the past years, many trees have been cut down and
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 of them, buildings have been built without following environmental principles, so it has become the most polluted city in Iran and the
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 in the world.
People
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's knowledge , awareness and culture are the other side of the coin .they should understand the side effects of
air
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pollution
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 from lung infections and asthma to early death, cancers and strokes .
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 education related to environmental protection should start from childhood. To sum up,
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car-free
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 day is an important step ,it is not complete. Both
governments
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 and individuals have
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an
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important role to control
air
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pollution
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