Some people think personal happiness is closely related to economic success, while others believe that it depends on other factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some
people
believe that personal happiness
and financial success are closely tied because wealth provides convenience, while others believe that happiness
relies on other things such
as social relationships. I personally believe that happiness
is more affected by social relations than economic growth.
First
, the reason for people
insisting that wealth decides personal happiness
is that money
makes our life
more comfortable. To be specific, by accumulating wealth, people
do not need to experience economic hardships for living or limit their life
on their budget. By achieving financial success, people
can be liberated from the inconvenience caused by poverty. As individuals improve their quality of life
, they will be able to find happiness
and contentment. Indeed, in a study from 2010, Princeton University researchers found that people
’s happiness
increases with their salary, but only up to $75,000 a year. As the income went higher, it allow people
to satisfy basic needs, leading to concrete improvements in their daily experiences. The funny fact is that, for incomes below $75,000, larger incomes were associated with greater experienced well-being, but beyond $75,000, there was no further
improvement. ////A possible implication is that, beyond $75,000, money
is just a way of “keeping score” in life
, and there might be little reason to care about further
increases in income as far as one’s day-to-day experience are concerned. ////For this
reason, I disagree that more money
leads to greater happiness
because money
has limits at some point.
On the other hand
, some people
believe that stable social relationships largely affect personal happiness
in life
. In fact, the No.1 contributor to happiness
is the quality of a person’s social circle and it’s human nature for people
to pursue a sense of belonging. Through well-connected/
established social groups such
as harmonious family, lovers, or friends, individuals can find emotional bondings to feel assured and lean on. Being
interconnected with friends and the community, Change preposition
By being
people
can find full of compassion, patience, and altruism toward others. For example
, sociologists at the University of California at Berkeley studied the link between social connections
and happiness
. The upshot of 50 years of happiness
research showed that the quantity and quality of a person’s social connections
are so closely related to well-being and personal happiness
that the two can practically be equated. As a result
, people
with stable friendships were less likely to experience sadness, loneliness, low self-esteem, and problems with eating and sleeping. In my opinion, I agree that being in healthy social relations outweighs financial achievements for personal happiness
because to enjoy material affluence needs a prior condition which is psychological stability based on social connections
.
In conclusion, while some individuals think that having money
brings convenience, which makes people
happier, others think that happiness
depends on other factors like social connections
. In my opinion, social interactions have a greater impact on happiness
than economic development because personal happiness
is more influenced by psychological stability based on social connections
than one’s financial status.Submitted by ghg5252 on
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