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Human activities have negative effects on plant and animals species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The negative effects of human activities on
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plants
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 and
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animals
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 species
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a
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 most important problem that many countries face.
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, some
people
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 think it is too late to do anything to change the situation, but
other
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others
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 believe that we can improve it through effective measures. In my opinion, I deeply agree with
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 that
people
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 should realize the
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 of
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 problem and do
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 best to resolve it. Some
people
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 think that protecting
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environment
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 or
animals
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 is too late. It is
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 that economy is developing all over the world.
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 lots of countries are
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 on the rate of economical increasing ignore
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environment
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 has been destroyed. So they think it is not useful to do anything.
Some
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 cities in China,
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, the solid has been becoming
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sand
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 because
people
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 destroyed
forest
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 to expand cities. As well as the population in these cities are raising at
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 speed but the
plants
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 and
animals
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 are decreasing very fast.
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, some
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 believe that we can do our best to
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control
contral
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control
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environment
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 we are living
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 The reason is with technology developed, we can find more methods to protect
plants
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 and
animals
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.
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addition
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 all the
people
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 have
same
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 realization to avoid
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environment
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be
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 destroyed.
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,
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biodiversity is
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 important
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 that most
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sciences
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 are researching. Maintaining
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 healthy balance of the chin of food is our duty. So we should
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try many ways to protect
plants
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 and
animals
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 because we can live alone without
plants
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 and
animals
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.
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, some developed nations announced laws to protect
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environment
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the environment
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 and encourage
people
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 to learn how to avoid
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 it.
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 is the wiser way to deliver
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 mind to
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. In conclusion,protecting
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environment
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 is one of the most important things that all
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people
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 should do.
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 it is not easy to achieve,
but
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we should
to
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do it step by step.
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