Human activities have negative effects on plant and animals species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The negative effects of human activities on
plants
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plant
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and
animals
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species
is
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a
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most important problem that many countries face.
However
, some
people
think it is too late to do anything to change the situation, but
other
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others
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believe that we can improve it through effective measures. In my opinion, I deeply agree with
this
that
people
should realize the
serious
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of
this
problem and do
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best to resolve it. Some
people
think that protecting
environment
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or
animals
is too late. It is
clearly
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that economy is developing all over the world.
That’s means
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lots of countries are
focus
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on the rate of economical increasing ignore
environment
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has been destroyed. So they think it is not useful to do anything.
Some
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cities in China,
for example
, the solid has been becoming
into
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sand
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the sand
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because
people
destroyed
forest
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forests
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to expand cities. As well as the population in these cities are raising at
high
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speed but the
plants
and
animals
are decreasing very fast.
On the other hand
, some
people
believe that we can do our best to
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control
contral
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control
and change the
environment
we are living
.
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The reason is with technology developed, we can find more methods to protect
plants
and
animals
.
In
addition
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all the
people
have
same
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the same
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realization to avoid
environment
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the environment
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be
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being
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destroyed.
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,
the
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biodiversity is
extremely
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important
subject
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that most
of
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sciences
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the sciences
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are researching. Maintaining
the
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healthy balance of the chin of food is our duty. So we should
to
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try many ways to protect
plants
and
animals
because we can live alone without
plants
and
animals
.
For instance
, some developed nations announced laws to protect
environment
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the environment
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and encourage
people
to learn how to avoid
to destroy
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it.
This
is the wiser way to deliver
positive
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mind to
people
. In conclusion,protecting
environment
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is one of the most important things that all
the
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people
should do.
Although
it is not easy to achieve,
but
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we should
to
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do it step by step.
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