People are becoming famous with the help of TV programmes and the internet. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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In today's contemporary
world
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, social media is considered
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of the major
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to be renowned to the whole
world
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First
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and foremost, there are a number of significant benefits of becoming a well-known person all over the
world
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the aid of the
internet
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since it gives an opportunity to individuals to make online
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like videos, vlogs and many more which
help
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them to be a famous person.
For example
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, there are several indexes are available on the
internet
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as
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TikTok, YouTube and Google which can help people to be popular.
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to
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,
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with
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the aid of
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this kind
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these kinds
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of social media platforms humans are not only trying to be
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famous but
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they are making a huge amount of money since
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this
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platforms are considered
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of the biggest
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of income and nowadays, hundreds of humans are making a considerable amount of money just by sharing their daily lives or interests through the
internet
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, televisions are
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one
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of the major factors that play a vital role
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becoming famous
through
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throughout
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the
world
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as at the present time everybody possesses a television. Turning to the other side of the argument, despite the obvious advantages of
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development, there are
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some disadvantages
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this
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Firstly
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, these days more and more people spend most of their time on the
internet
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for the purpose of being famous among
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society
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while paying
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minimum
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of attention
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to their families and outdoor activities and
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may cause mental and health problems.
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,
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some people
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consider
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online video
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as
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a matter of annoyance since nowadays majority of the videos which take place on the
internet
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are immoral. To conclude, having everything mentioned
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I can come to the conclusion
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that, in
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the
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social media is
one
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of the primary factors for humans who are willing to be
reknown
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known
through the nations since it gives an opportunity to be
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popular within a short period of time,
however
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, it can be
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mentally dangerous to individuals' health.
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