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Crime rate,in most countries ,is often higer in urban areas than in rural areas .why do you think that is?what can be done to reduce the problem.

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frequently
fequently
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frequently
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areas
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 rather than in rural
areas
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,
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raised
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 in many countries in urban
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 rather than in rural
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because
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 lack of
opportunity
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people
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 in remote area
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does not
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job
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area
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people
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 to start their
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 easy to do anything in remote
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crime
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increase
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whose
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areas
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students are well
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 but there
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job
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 opportunities in villages . to solve
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 problem government ought should
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job
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give
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 to them.
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, there is
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several
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 issue which I would like to highlight in remote
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technology
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crime
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increase
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because
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aware
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about
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technology
technogy
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technology
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people
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 know about the internet and 20 % of youth is earning from online
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businesses
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business
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people
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 who live in villages
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. they can't take advantage
from
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why
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crime
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 rate is
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increase
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. to sort it out, government give
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knowledge
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knowledge
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technology
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technology
 and how can we use
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 our daily lives. to sum up,
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crime
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 rate,in many countries, is getting higher and higher in remote cities rather than
a big cities
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lack
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 of opportunity and
people
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less
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about
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technology
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. according to
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community we reduce
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job
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urban
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an urban
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area
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 and
aware
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being aware
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about
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technology
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