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Is the radio the best way to get news, OR is TV better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#radio #news #tv #purpose
I think that
radio
 is the best way to get
news
 or an event because there are many disadvantages to TV and now
i
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 want to discuss two options with them.
However
, the
radio
also
 has its minus, but it has a lot of pluses. When want to know the latest
news
 just turn off the
radio
 and do your job and
then
 have enough time for everything because the
radio
 is easily accessible.
In addition
, many older people prefer the
radio
 for too long and get used to it and they find that the
radio
perfect
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 for them. For
an
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example, my grandmother
prefer
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 the
radio
 and she says that
radio
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 is a convenient way to get information
and
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it turns out she can't see the event and damage people
,
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because she is afraid and can't stand herself.
Besides
 that, popular people
also
 prefer the
radio
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to
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waste their precious time on television.
However
, most teens find television to be the easier option
therefore
 many teenagers watch
an
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events
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 as it unfolds. For
an
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example, when we see
news
 about car accidents or something we can easily observe the damage and root cause even though we are not there. In conclusion, from my point of
view
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i
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think
tnink
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think
 that both
radio
 and TV are the best
option
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options
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 to know the
news
 and event
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