Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, some
people
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think it is easy to have a healthy
lifestyle
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, but others do not agree.
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me
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, I agree it is easy
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a large extent. Some
people
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think it is hard to build a healthy
lifestyle
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. In my point of view, there are two main reasons for that.
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, the internet is very attractive and with the development of
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, there were many interesting
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popped out,
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as
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Buying
, a short video platform, and
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some
game
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. As we know, teenagers and young
people
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can not control themselves very well,
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they might stay up late to surfer
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online, play some games and so on. I used to be one of them, I stay up late watching NBA
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or just
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with my friend.
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,
people
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who have bad
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lifestyle
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always have no idea about what they should do,
that
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means they do not have
fixed
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a fixed
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daily schedule.
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, if you have a healthy schedule, it will tell you to eat
meal
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ontime
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time
, to gain enough sleep time,
to
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and to
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work effectively. So, a healthy schedule will lead you to have a healthy
lifestyle
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. For those
people
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who think it is easy to have a healthy
lifestyle
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, the reason is
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the following
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:
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, it
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very hard for children to control themselves, but they can ask
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an adult
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adult
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adults
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for help like parents, teachers or someone else, to adults they keep teenagers away from bad living habits,
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,
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if they really
wants
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want
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to be healthy, they will look after themselves well.
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, when I was in junior high, I was a bad boy who will stay up late and do some bad things, but once I get hurt
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my knee, I came to
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how important to have a healthy
lifestyle
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and stay healthy. So I began to correct my error, sleep enough,
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and get
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up early.... that’s really
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. Anyway, everyone has
everyone’s
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opinion. I do think it’s easy to have
a healthy
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a healthy life style
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life styles
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lifestyles
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if you truly want to.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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