Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Now, some
people
believes
that Change the verb form
believe
the
modern Correct article usage
apply
technology
will have enormous
Correct article usage
an enormous
affect
Replace the word
effect
for
Change preposition
on
human
healthy lifestyle, Add an article
a human
meanwhile
others think that we can use Add a comma
,meanwhile
technology
for
Change preposition
to
make
our Change the form of the verb
making
life
more Correct your spelling
convenient
convinaint
and easy. I think that we can Correct your spelling
convenient
suiteable
use modern Correct your spelling
suitable
tool
Fix the agreement mistake
tools
for
Change preposition
to
improve
our Change the verb form
improving
life
.
First
, the
modern Correct article usage
apply
technology
like transport methods are
always have large help and benefits to our Unnecessary verb
apply
Correct your spelling
society
sociality
sociasity
. Correct your spelling
society
although
the car, airplane
, and Fix the agreement mistake
airplanes
boat
around Fix the agreement mistake
boats
world
will have big Add an article
the world
amount
of chemical pollution like carbon Change the noun form
amounts
dioxid
which would destroy Correct your spelling
dioxide
forest
, animals or even earth Fix the agreement mistake
forests
life
systems. But it can save our
a lot of time for travel to Correct pronoun usage
us
another
Correct quantifier usage
other
Correct your spelling
country
country's
countrys
or transport good, which make sure that Correct your spelling
countries
whole
world Correct article usage
the whole
people
can connect together for
Change preposition
to
establish
human Change the verb form
establishing
social
.
On the other Replace the word
society
hands
, the internet Fix the agreement mistake
hand
also
is most
important Correct article usage
the most
things
Fix the agreement mistake
thing
at
modern Change preposition
in
people
daily Change noun form
people's
life
. maybe it make
a large Change the verb form
makes
Replace the word
percentage
percents
of Correct your spelling
per cent
teenager
or young Add an article
the teenager
a teenager
people
attack
by mobile phone and computer games. Wrong verb form
attacked
However
, websites are
Change to the active voice
also become
have also become
also
become one part of our normal life
, for
example
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,example
people
need use
Fix the infinitive
to use
Correct article usage
a computer
computer
or research information on online or study.
Meanwhile, their still some part correct for modern things will influences Fix the agreement mistake
computers
people
healthy Change noun form
people's
life
. we know that the fast food chain like KFC around
the whole Add a missing verb
are around
of
Change preposition
apply
world
. so that means a large percentage Add an article
the world
people
Change preposition
of people
are really enjoy
Change the verb form
really enjoy
to eat
junk or Change the verb form
eating
nonnutritions
food, it definitely will harm Correct your spelling
non nutritious
Correct article usage
the humans
humans
body.
In conclusion, Change the noun form
human
although
the
modern Correct article usage
apply
technology
have
Change the verb form
has
few
disadvantage thing Correct article usage
a few
but
we have Remove the conjunction
apply
opportunity
to control Correct article usage
the opportunity
this kinds
of bad influence and make it more useful to change our Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
life
better than now.Submitted by melindaguan0704 on
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