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Some people think high-end technology can prevent and cut-down the rate of committing crimes. Do you agree or disagree?

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Crimes can be seen cutting down in number as new advanced technologies are helping the cops or the community to deal better with
such
 activities. I strongly believe
with
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this
 passage. New advancements in
this
 digital world helped people stay safe as gadgets like
cctv
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CCTV
Cctv
 cameras, drones,
gps
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GPS
, live locations and plastic money help
generation
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 travel free without thinking about crimes. Females in
the
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society can share
the
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 live location
to
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 their families so that they keep a track of where she is, Drones,
cctv
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CCTV
Cctv
 cameras help the police find the crime location and the related areas to catch the culprit. Youth use debit cards, credit cards and
UPI's
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 to reduce
the
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pick pocketing
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 while
traveling
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in
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 public transport or in markets.
Thus
 it is clearly evident that technologies are making lives easy and
crime free
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.
On the
contrary
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 if we consider criminals are
also
 using
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technology well as they are more into cyber crimes
such
 as sending a random link to
older
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 generation with the greed of winning a lottery and
this
 leads to digital money
released
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 to the criminals.
This
 can
also
 be detected by
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police officials by tracking the location of the laptop and the internet. Another disadvantage is
government
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 needs to have a
high end
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 budget to install the cameras in the streets of the local market, buses, metros,
stations
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. To Conclude agreeing
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this
 point that
technology
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 advancement is a positive outcome. More and more individuals should download certain safety apps
in
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 their mobiles to keep them safe from all these frauds and robberies.
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