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Some people believe that all the children in school are required to learn at least one foreign language. However, others say that those who are not talented do not have to learn. What is your opinion?

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For
children
 in school, learning a foreign
language
 or not should be determined by the school curriculum. Provided that it is offered as a subject, all
students
 – talented or
otherwise
- must
study
 it as partial fulfilment of their academic achievement. The
study
 of a foreign
language
 – especially English for
children
 in Grades is now a compulsory requirement at all primary schools in my country
although
 it was not the case just a few years ago. With increased globalisation, comes increased cross-cultural contact and because of
this
, it is important for
children
 to master at least one foreign
language
 at an early age so as to prepare them for
this
 global society. Understanding a foreign
language
 is
also
 an opportunity for
children
 to learn about and understand a little about another culture or culture.
Also
, it is an opportunity to cultivate
students
’ talent, develop their ability in learning and boost their potential for
further
 education. It is irresponsible, and indeed, even harmful, to separate and label
students
 as talented or not in education at
such
 a tender and vulnerable age. Why should the
study
 of a foreign
language
 alone be used as the only yardstick to label
students
 as talented or not in education? It is advisable to help all
students
 to understand that the
study
 of a foreign
language
 will bring benefit to their studies and, in the future, their careers.
Thus
, I feel that it is not healthy to advocate the labelling of
students
 as talented or not in the
study
 of languages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • talented
  • beneficial
  • enhances
  • cognitive skills
  • cultural understanding
  • job prospects
  • option
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