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Living in a country where you have to spaek a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

#country #spaek #language
Living in a foreign country where people must communicate with others in other
languages
instead
 of their mother tongue, may lead to significant challenges for
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foreigners. in my point of view,
although
 generally humans may be faced
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 problems in
the
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society due to speaking foreign
languages
, the severity of difficulties thoroughly depends on
that
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which
language
 they have to use.
To begin
 with, speeching in abroad
languages
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overseas has always caused obstacles for
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 kinds. Since they were not
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exposed
exposure
exposured
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exposed
 to that
language
 as well as their own
language
,
therefore
, some aspects of
new
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language
 will be covered for them forever.
For instance
, if a European person
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 to China, he has to connect to Chinese with their
language
. So the stranger should put extreme effort
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 it , like allocating sums of his budget
on
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language
 courses,
exclusiving
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exclusive
 huge part of
time
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 to
practice
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 it
instead
 of going to work etc.
However
 all
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mankind
mankinds
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mankind
 are always confronted with obstacles, and troubles the seriousness of strugglings had been dissimilar for each
language
. In the sense that, some
languages
,
such
 as French, and English are counted as
an
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international
language
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.
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 we have been getting acquainted with them since we were child, thank
to
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global cartoons, schools and
traveling
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to
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abroad.
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 if we want to start learning French, or English we are not forced to spend as much
as
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time, budget,
energy
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 that we have to apply for Chinese
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 is totally weird to non-Chinese. In conclusion, keeping in touch with foreigners in their
language
 contains undeniable hurdles for the individuals who are not local there, while the rate of the frustration of learning each
language
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 not alike.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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