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People are becoming famous with the help of TV programmes and the internet. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

#people #help #tv #programmes #internet
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Nowadays one of the widely discussed
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 is humans are become
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 with the
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 of social media.
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, there is no absolute agreement as some
people
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 find it beneficial, while others consider everything associated with it negatively. In
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 controversial
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. On the one hand, there are a number of significant benefits of
people
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 who have some gifts are able to popular through the
internet
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 immediately as
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internet
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 is becoming more widely all over
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the world.
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, tik tok,
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Tobe, Twitter, Instagram, Facebook and different popular things
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on the
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. Another advantage is
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 a lot of opportunities us for earn. Many
people
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 on the
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 know about his abilities.
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, hairdressers show their abilities and can see everyone
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.
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, turning to the other side of the argument,
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 should behave themselves on the
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. The number of divorces among
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 which popular is a lot of incitement and gossip.
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, being famous is a very difficult profession. These can pose massive obstacles for
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 because they require
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 to move beyond the familiar and into the unknown, which can often be awkward and scary. In conclusion, having weighed everything mentioned up, I can come to
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 conclusion that individuals are famous with the
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 the
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,
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and being
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 popular is a quite difficult and responsible profession. As they say, be as you are, be as you are, charge for the masses is not the right thing to do.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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