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In many places, new homes are needed , but the only space available for building them is in the country side. Some people beleive it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #country #side #people #beleive #countryside
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The line graph shows the portion of the income from the poorest to the richest people spent on
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 in two different countries.

 Overall, richer individuals spent more of their salaries on
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 in the United Kingdom, whereas the United States showed the opposite trend, poorer ones spent more money on it.
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, those with middle income showed similar percentages in both nations.
 The poorest citizens between Britain and America saw the greatest difference in the total earnings of the portion on
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, which was about 0.5% and just under 4%, respectively.
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, British people with middle income were six times the number of the poorest ones and
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 increased slightly to approximately 4% as they got rich, which was the same as Americans with that rate. Richer British remained the same percentage of their earnings on that material at about 4%. 

It is worth noting that poorer individuals on
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 from their percentage of salaries in America went up sharply from under 4% to just over 5%, which reached a peak, but it was a gradual drop in the rich group at only half of the previous value.
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