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n some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start until they are seven or eight. How far do you agree with either of these views?

#n #countries #children #education #four #years #seven #eight
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 the percentage of
women
 in
poverty
 and rates of
teh
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the
poverty
 by gender and age in
USA
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the USA
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 in 2008. Overall, it can be seen that single
women
 with no dependent
children
was
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 the majority of the
women
 in
poverty
, while married
women
 with no
denpendent
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dependent
dependents
children
was
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 the minority
of
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poverty
. In detail, single
women
 with no dependent
children
 accounted for around half of
poverty
, at 54%. Whereas married
women
 with no dependent
children
 possessed around one-tenths of
poverty
, at 8%. Rates of
poverty
 by sex and age had the same amount of males and females
at
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under 5 years old, at 20%.
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, almost
of
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periods had the
amount
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 of
women
 more than men, there were 3 periods, 5-17, 25-34 and 75-up,
the
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 number of
women
 outweigh men
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 5%. And there were 2 p
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