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Playing team sports is good for children to prepare for working life or not. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#team #sports #children #life
Dear Chalk you must keep in mind that your university training is the preparation
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 your future career.
Therefore
, your
first
 consideration should be to learn a subject which can better equip you to earn a living. There is no doubt that the field of
computer
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computers
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 can offer far wider job opportunities than history. I feel the least I could do as a husband,
that
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is, to be by her side and
to
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take care of her after the baby arrives.
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