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Many people join the distance-learning programs (study, learning material, post, Tv, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefits as attending college or university does. DO you agree or disagree?

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in recent times there several forms of gaining knowledge , most
people
 enrol for online teaching programs and learn in their houses, but few
people
 claim that it's better to be present in
a higher educational institutions
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higher educational institutions
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.
This
 essay will elucidate why I absolutely believe that physical learning programs are more memorable than
the
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digital education systems.
To begin
, being present in school creates a more adequate studying environment than learning at home as
this
 can improve one's assimilation as well as performance in
the
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school activities. The university environment is built in a way
that is
 suitable for gaining proper knowledge.
For instance
 , in ,Nigeria it has been recorded that over ten years colleges that offer physical classes produce more bright students than
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a distance learning institutions
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a distance learning institution
distance learning institutions
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.
This
 is
however
 a plus because it's impossible to achieve record-breaking grades while learning at home .
Although
,
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 the majority of students would achieve their academic pursuit through online colleges,
this
 is mainly because it is flexible and
hence
, they have more time to work and carry out their several daily activities. An example is the national open university programs in Nigeria most of its students who apply for
this
 training are politicians, celebrities and
people
 in the business world that may find it difficult to register for a physical university. It ensures that others gain knowledge and
attain
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 their desired education qualification. Conclusively, it is essential to note that many
people
 would prefer distance learning due to the aforementioned reasons.
However
, I strongly disagree with
this
 system of learning because a better understanding and feedback cannot be achieved but being present in schools fosters effective learning.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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