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Some people think that the media (newspapers) have the right to publish details of people’s private life, while others think it should be controlled. Discuss both views

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Nowadays, the media play a fundamental role in order to provide information and keep updated the population. Someone argues that specific information about
people
's private
life
 should be kept private while others say that newspapers have to provide content about
people
's
privacy
. Personally, I strongly agree with the former opinion and in
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 I will explain and discuss the reasons. On one hand, in a society with full access to the internet and social media,
privacy
 has gained more importance than in the past. Today our private
life
 is to maintain reserved. Gossip has become very popular among individuals and everyone is looking for something new to talk about
such
 as scandal or scandal. When journals report a piece of news, they should respect the
privacy
 of the subject of the article, like address, family and kids,
this
 is due to the fact that the scoop can ruin
people
's existence or expose them to pressure.
For instance
, some months ago in my town, a local gazette spread the scandal about a teacher and the abuse of his pupils at school. As expected,
this
 story destroyed the woman's
life
, and after the check
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fake report, but his reputation was already ruined.
On the other hand
, in order to provide accountable news, the media should provide detailed data. Specific information can let the reader understand completely the story, knowing every detail. A lot of experts suggest to young journalists give more data as possible, so
people
 can imagine the perfect scenario in their mind while they are reading the article. An example
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 could be the section in the journal that talks about criminals: in that specific situation the writer has the right to provide all the facts that emerged from the investigations. To conclude, individual
privacy
 is one of the most valuable things today and the mass
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 have to respect it in most situations. Before publishing a new article, the writer should ask himself if providing specific details about a person could ruin his
life
.
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