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It is difficult for many people to create a balance between their professional and their personal life. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Everybody wants to maintain their professional and personal
life
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, many of them face difficulties with it.In
this
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 essay,I will discuss the causes behind it and try to give a solution to
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problem
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 with,there are many reasons behind
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 kind of
problem
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 one of them is the wrong way of thinking.
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,
people
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 do not find the difference between their work
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 and family
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,they mix up between them up,
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,a person does work in the office from 10am to 5pm it is his professional
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,after and before
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 particular
time
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 man or women are part of their families,
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,his or her self as well.
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,after and before duty
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 they think about the responsibility left behind them.
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 is what we can call a lack of knowledge and experience.Another reason behind it was
people
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 are run for money always from one place to another.They even do not have
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 for eating and sleeping as well.
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, it is the reality that both the
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 and solution are the two sides of the same coin which run in parallel.The main solution to the
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 is to learn self and from family and experience the
people
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 around us.There is no school or college to learn about
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 topic,
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, we can learn from our own family and neighbourhood as experienced
people
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 around as well,
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,we can talk and listen to our family members about what they want from us. everyone is eager for love and care, especially
time
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 for them to spend. In conclusion,most
people
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 still do not know the reason behind
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, and that's why their family is always angry with them.So everyone should learn money is not everything,their health and family happiness is
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 the most important points in their
life
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Submitted by bhattaraikeshav2014 on

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