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You recently returned from oversea by air and left a valuable item on the plane. Write a letter to the airline manager. In your letter .Describe the item you left behind .Say why it is important to you .Explain what you would like the airline manager to do

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Dear Sir. I hope
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 message finds you well. I am writing to inform you about my situation. I actually returned from an economic trip to Saudi Arabia on plane AS4521 on 23rd October.
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, unfortunately, I left a Visa card under my chair, my son's blue iPad and my wife's brown handbag.
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, these items are really valuable to my family. Because the iPad is expensive and means a lot to my son as it includes many valuable memories.
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, in terms of
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, it's essential because the process of getting a new card requires time and effort. Could you please ask the staff to check my seat W345, it should be under or close the
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. I am able to pay a charge for any service. Thank you for your time and assistance. I hope I was polite and clear. I am eagerly waiting for your response. Yours Faithfully, Naif Nazawi.
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task achievement
While your letter is very polite and effectively communicates the main issue, it's important to specifically request that the airline manager confirm the process for handling such lost items. This can enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure to use complete sentences and avoid fragmentary phrases for better readability. For instance, the sentence 'it should be under or close the seatI.' is missing some words for complete clarity.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is formal and appropriate for addressing an airline manager, which enhances its effectiveness.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the letter is logical, with each paragraph focusing on a specific point, such as describing the items, explaining their importance, and requesting assistance.
coherence and cohesion
Your closing is polite and appropriately formal, aligning well with the overall tone of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable item
  • left behind
  • overhead compartment
  • flight attended
  • identifiable features
  • lost and found
  • retrieve
  • significant
  • service provided
  • correspondence
  • prompt response
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