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Today, more and more people use robots to do tasks at home and at work. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Why?

#people #robots #tasks #home #work #development
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With a dramatic speed in technology development,
robots
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are became
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 evident in many of our lives and business. Some people considered to have a
robot
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 at home could reduce
time
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consuming
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 on housework or some labour demanding business
such
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 as
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restaurants could maintain the costs of hiring more employees. In my opinion, it is positive to use
robots
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 for
a
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better growth of the country and an easier life to live with. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my
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stand points
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standpoints
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 with
explainations
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explanations
explanation
.
To
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the
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 business perspective, running a company is
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stressful
things
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especially
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 with the high expenses from expensive labour costs. Having a
robot
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 could possibly help with many types of
task
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tasks
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 in order to retain an upward organised
and
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health management system and increase customer satisfaction.
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, a
robot
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 could deliver
foods
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 directly to the customer's table with a matching pre-set number in their program,
this
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 method will not only rises the efficiency of the restaurant
,
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 but
also
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 could avoid making mistake by
place
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 a wrong order
of
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on
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 the menu. Another reason to support my point of view is
the
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that
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robots
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 might
refining
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 human lives. Getting all the house chores done after a busy day at work sounds very
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to
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too
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 many mordent
family
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 in the city.
By having
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 a
robot
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 at home to complete the cleaning job, it
allow
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 you
concentrate
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 on your own time
on
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 relaxation, cooking or even when you watching TV on your couch. In conclusion,
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robots
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 might be not affordable for everyone at the moment,
but
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if we could take
the
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advantages
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 of
its
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 course more issues and
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time wasting
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 tasks could be probably disappeared.
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