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Some people believe arts subjects such as literature and music have little importance in schools today. To what extent do you agree with this?

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In recent times,
science
 is getting over
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attention
attension
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attention
 compared to
arts
 and
literature
. Even ,
now a days
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nowadays
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,
this
 is
fact
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a fact
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 for the case schools and colleges. It is agreed that the
arts
subject
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subjects
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such
 as
literature
,
music
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and music
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are
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 not getting much
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attention
attension
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attention
 today in school. Over importance of the curriculum
activities
 and
science
subject based
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 carrier guidance will prove that their priority in the education
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society
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society
 is considerably low.
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 with
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agreement
agrrement
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agreement
, curriculum
activities
 getting
over
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emphasis over
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extracurricular
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extra curricular
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extracurricular
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activities
such
 as music and writing competition.
For instance
 , if any free time
available
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is available
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, students are asked
them
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apply
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to study the books they have been taught , rather than suggesting to go
for
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to
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 the general library or a musical club. it clearly indicates
arts
 and
literature
 is the least priority of schools. In
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an
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 another case, the carrier guidance programme at school always
give
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gives
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 a
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preference
preferece
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preference
 to explain the
science
subject
 scopes like opportunities in the medical field, engineering, industries and scientific research.
on the other hand
 , Neither they give any consideration for music and
literature
 nor discuss the opportunities
out of
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that.
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, schools are less bothered about the non-
science
subject
. To conclude,
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the institution
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institution
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 attitude to depromote the extra curriculum
activities
 and over emphasising the
science related
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science-related
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 job opportunity is at
peak
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its peak
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.
Aforementioned
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statement
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statements
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 are
the
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clear evidence of
low
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the low
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 importance of
arts
 and
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music
muscic
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music
 in primary and upper primary education systems. It is
a
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high time to arrange
orientation
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an orientation
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 programme
to
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 the concerned authorities and teachers ,
for
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make
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 them understand and
aware
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be aware
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the
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 role of other art forms in education.
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