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People today spend less and less time interacting with other people in their neighborhood and this has a negative impact on communities. What are the possible causes and solutions to this problem?

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Social interaction is getting lesser by the year, People hardly know their neighbours,
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 definitely has a negative impact on individuals and
society
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 I will discuss the reasons for social aloofness and suggest some possible solutions to address the issue. One of the main reasons for people not interacting is their busy lifestyle. In many ,family both partners are employed and when they are home they are busy prepping for the
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 week or catching up with their child's school work. Weekends usually are reserved for class runs for the children, grocery shopping and resting,
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 leaves them with little time to socialise with the members of their
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. The
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 reason is social media, even when people have time , they are more engaged in social platforms like Facebook and Instagram,
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 of actually talking to a person. When we go out for parties these days, it is a common site to see everyone engrossed in their mobile phones. Human beings are
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social animals and we live in a
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 for a reason,
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 the support system.
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 ,we need to consciously make the effort to be a part of the
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 we dwell in.Local association groups can
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 contribute to
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 by having an active organisation , where everyone has a distinct role , having regular meetings, events etc would encourage interaction. To conclude, we are social animals and we need to be more interactive and involved in
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society
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. Individual and local organisations can work together to make
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